I found her at the fence, where I always do.
“Any luck?”
She didn’t bother looking at me with hatred in her eyes, or spitting recriminations, or crying or begging. She’s gotten over all that. “Of course not.”
It must be difficult for her, to want to escape so badly but to have been rendered incapable of doing something so simple as crossing a fence-line. A deer could jump it easily; she cannot climb it or slip between the boards.
“Why not come inside?”
She just stared across the marsh into the mist. Perhaps she’ll try to kill me again.
An interesting story.
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DeleteA thought provoking piece, and I love the photograph.
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DeleteJust a little typo - Simply should be simple.
ReplyDeleteOtherwise, I found this quite captivating - quite unusual and mysterious.
Good catch... will fix! Thanks. :-)
DeleteThis one's full of mystery - I wonder who she is and what she's incarcerated for. Intriguing
ReplyDeleteI wonder too... this could have easily become a 500-1000 word flash. Maybe sometime I'll expand it.
DeleteWonder if she is a cripple and if he was responsible-so she wants to kill him?Enjoyed this-definitely a mysterious one!:-)
ReplyDeleteI feel like it's a spell that prevents her from taking the action of crossing the fence-line, like in that Buffy episode where they can't leave the party, :-)
DeleteI wouldn't turn my back on her... nicely done
ReplyDeleteThank you! :-)
DeleteDear David,
ReplyDeleteIntriguing, atmospheric and left me wanting more. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks! :-)
DeleteI like this - ominous but oblique, just enough to make me want to know more.
ReplyDeleteI like that: "ominous but oblique." That's pretty much what I was going for. :-)
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