He stopped, knelt, placed his hand against the ground, stayed there for what seemed like an eternity. The others seemed inured to this behavior. Shayl asked someone, in a whisper, “What’s he doing?”
Before anyone could answer, he stood, looked around, looked at Shayl. “There was a city here. Many people, many buildings.”
“When?” She asked, looking around, seeing only bare rock and desolation.
He shrugged. “Ten thousand years? Twelve? Long time.”
“But how do you know these things?”
“The past is here, now, if you know how to see it.”
“…Magic.”
He laughed. “Yes, magic. I will teach you.”
Very interesting - he has an almost Merlin-like quality about him.
ReplyDeleteI have him pictured as more of a Shaman, subtle magic, very connected to the Earth.
DeleteLucky girl. I wish someone would teach me some. Well done.
ReplyDeleteYou and me both, sister. :-)
DeleteIf your ever find someone who does send them my way after to you learn their secrets.
DeleteWill do :-)
DeleteDear David,
ReplyDeleteA very Kung Fu feel to this. I could see Keye Luke's Master Po. "I will teach you, Grasshopper." At any rate, I enjoyed your story.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Magic is only that which we don't yet understand. This feels like the opening to a very interesting story
ReplyDeleteThank you for reading :-)
DeleteInspiring!
ReplyDeleteThanks! :-)
DeleteA very interesting and well-done story. It would be a great hook to a longer story. It leaves me wondering if it's Earth of the past, future or another planet.
ReplyDeleteI feel like it's probably an alt-Earth...
DeleteI love magic
ReplyDeleteI like turtles.
DeleteYes, excellent! Would love to hear more of these characters.
ReplyDeleteThank you very much! :-)
DeleteGreat. When's the next piece?
ReplyDeleteI hope to write something today, either for Chuck Wendig's prompt or for Write On Edge's prompt.
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