She knows where she's going, where they're going, where she's taking him.
He follows on, trying to keep his bearings and his socks dry; soon enough he gives up on both. "How much further?"
She doesn't answer at first. He hurries to catch up to her, splashing and cursing. When he reaches her elbow she says, "Tired?"
"No," he insists. He doesn't want her to think he's changed his mind. "Just wondering."
The stream curves around a hill capped by an old oak; she leads him up by the hand, sits in the shade, takes off her sweater.
"Here?"
"Here."
Gripping and quite intriguing...
ReplyDeleteI'm glad it's 'intriguing' as opposed to 'obvious'. I worried I was being too explicit. :))
Deletehah! well done!
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
DeleteThe ending surprised me.
ReplyDeleteI had to look up the title to find out the meaning.
I had to look up a name that meant something that would resonate with the character. Originally I was looking for a name with a running-water association (there are more names like that than you might think, though apparently not on the list of Irish names I was perusing.) When I saw what Saoirse meant, I thought, 'ok, that's actually perfect.'
DeleteAh yes, I completely feel she is the leader!
ReplyDeleteShe has agency :)
DeleteCertainly the best of all the entries . . .
ReplyDeleteThat's very kind of you to say, thank you. :)
Deletedef like her style!..excellent..
ReplyDeleteTwo movie lines came to mind..."I Know Where I'm Going"...and "here hare here" from "Withnail and I"...
ReplyDeleteHaven't seen it :/ But it's on Netflix so I may give it a watch :)
DeleteA good storyline with the twist at the end. Sounds like in the end they make love anfter they found the perfect place. Bravo!
ReplyDeleteI think maybe you are right. :-)
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